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by Holly on March 27, 2009 at 12:00 am
Chapter: 0-Prologue
  • http://aimlessdevelopment.com Ian

    Nitpick: I’d replace the comma after Azatoth with either a period, exclamation mark or (probably best) a question mark, and I might also want to put a “beat” between “An Azatoth?” and “Am I a prisoner” with a separate word bubble connected to the first. That’d make the dialog flow a little better.