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by Holly on May 25, 2009 at 12:00 am
Chapter: 0-Prologue
  • Rachel

    Last panel you forgot the ‘n’ in confident. But that’s okay because at this point you were probably almost ready to pass out ha

  • admin

    Damn! lol, I knew I’d miss something.

    Thanks for the help, Rachel! 😀

    -Holly

  • http://aimlessdevelopment.com Ian

    Just going to comment again that you’re really doing a great job of selling the character relationships in the redone prologue! :)

  • Wraith

    Hey, just stumbled across this comic, and I like what I see so far. There is one line on this page that reads kinda awkward to me. Agrippa in Panel 2:
    “We hiked in from just 25 kilometers from here.”
    Using from twice in such close proximity kinda tripped me up. You may consider changing it to something like:
    We hiked in from just 25 kilometers away.”
    Just a suggestion.

    Now, to continue my archive binge . . .

  • http://www.terra-comic.com Holly

    Yeah, I totally agree. I guess I just didn’t notice before. Thanks for pointing that out, when I re-letter the prologue (for print) I’ll make a note to fix that.

  • http://fightingforgod.com Jeremy

    I really like what I’ve seen so far… nice art, especially the shading. Just one small quibble (coming from an EMT): a broken bone is a fracture and a fracture is a broken bone. Most people think they are different things, or different degrees of injury, but they aren’t, and a soldier with basic field training would know that. I realize that is pedantic, but just thought I’d bring it to your attention. Keep up the good work!

  • http://www.terra-comic.com Drew

    To Jeremy: Not always the case, I remember doing basic training and during the first aid portion of the course they never once mentioned that. I was also in for awhile and the entire time no one told me that. I had to use Google to actually find the proof to tell you the truth. But that’s just such a minor thing it doesn’t really matter to much. lol thanks for the info though.

  • Torg51

    The reble’s uniforms kind of reminds me of the Browncoats unifirms from Firefly.

  • PAOLO

    Heavy inspiration from the ME series?