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by Holly on May 25, 2009 at 12:00 am

Chapter: 0-Prologue

Rachel

Last panel you forgot the ‘n’ in confident. But that’s okay because at this point you were probably almost ready to pass out ha
admin

Damn! lol, I knew I’d miss something.

Thanks for the help, Rachel! 😀

-Holly
http://aimlessdevelopment.com Ian

Just going to comment again that you’re really doing a great job of selling the character relationships in the redone prologue!
Wraith

Hey, just stumbled across this comic, and I like what I see so far. There is one line on this page that reads kinda awkward to me. Agrippa in Panel 2:
“We hiked in from just 25 kilometers from here.”
Using from twice in such close proximity kinda tripped me up. You may consider changing it to something like:
We hiked in from just 25 kilometers away.”
Just a suggestion.

Now, to continue my archive binge . . .
http://www.terra-comic.com Holly

Yeah, I totally agree. I guess I just didn’t notice before. Thanks for pointing that out, when I re-letter the prologue (for print) I’ll make a note to fix that.
http://fightingforgod.com Jeremy

I really like what I’ve seen so far… nice art, especially the shading. Just one small quibble (coming from an EMT): a broken bone is a fracture and a fracture is a broken bone. Most people think they are different things, or different degrees of injury, but they aren’t, and a soldier with basic field training would know that. I realize that is pedantic, but just thought I’d bring it to your attention. Keep up the good work!
http://www.terra-comic.com Drew

To Jeremy: Not always the case, I remember doing basic training and during the first aid portion of the course they never once mentioned that. I was also in for awhile and the entire time no one told me that. I had to use Google to actually find the proof to tell you the truth. But that’s just such a minor thing it doesn’t really matter to much. lol thanks for the info though.
Torg51

The reble’s uniforms kind of reminds me of the Browncoats unifirms from Firefly.
PAOLO

Heavy inspiration from the ME series?

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