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by Holly on September 15, 2009 at 12:00 am
Chapter: 1-Chapter One
  • Duskbringer

    Why do I get the suspicion that she’s gonna get shot and crash close by them? 😛

  • http://lightning-powered.deviantart.com LP

    Like the direction it’s going so far =)

  • Vuther

    Overexposure to fiction? :)

  • Duskbringer

    Yeah probably… :) Anyways, like LP said, I like it so far. Even if what I predicted were to become true, I’d be more than thrilled cuz:

    a; I’d be a seer/prophet
    b; the way I see is waaaaaay awesome! 😛

    But I’m pretty sure Holly has better things to shove down our drooling mouths down this pit, right Miss? ^^

  • admin

    Hmm, I can’t really comment at this point without giving anything away. Guess you’ll just have to wait to find out :D.

    -Holly

  • Llanowar

    First off, I love the comic. It is some of the best art I’ve seen on the web in a long time.
    That being said, I have a bit of constructive criticism: I find the number and placement of bold, emphasized terms to be a bit off. I find it throws off the flow of the dialogue.
    Try saying things that you’ve written out loud. Leave a gap before and after bolded words, and exagerate that word. If it seems to fit, keep it in. If it sounds unusually odd, as I found some of them do, keep it in.
    Other than that, I don’t see anything that can readily be done to improve such a stellar work, Keep it up.

  • Torg51

    The problem with prophets, is that people don’t really like genuine prophets, becaus realaty isn’t really what people want to here, so true prophets tend to get killed, and the fake ones make a bundle until they get discovered, at which point, they move on.